1) A closing sentence from a finished work. This sentence is from Courtly Scandals, my recently completed novel. Note -- I scrolled randomly and selected this sentence from the first stopping point I came across (which happened to be the end of chapter 9).
This time, Mary took a swig of her drink. Hardly tasting the honey and spice of the mead, she swallowed and choked, “Pray excuse me,” before turning back into the fray of the ballroom.
2) The first sentence from my newest project (written yesterday). This is the opening sentence from Courtly Marriage. I wrote a different opening last week, deleted the whole thing, and rewrote it yesterday. :)
Jane hefted her full hoopskirts and sprinted across the orchard as fast as she could .
Happy birthday, Summer!
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14 comments:
Thank you for the birthday wishes! Great sentences, I bet these reads will be wonderful! happy writing and thank you Fairy much for participating
Hi, nice to meet you, Erin! Love that you write period pieces. Look forward to more of your posts. :)
Nice on the hoop skirts.
Hi,
1) Mary in embarassing situation, yet again: loved it! :o
2) running from or to?
best
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Man, I just noticed I posted 2 sentences for the first one. I apologize for my carelessness. Prior to that ending, Mary had commented that mead was meant to be sipped and appreciated, not swigged.
FH - Jane is running to the other side of the orchard. She wants to be there in time to casually intercept the neighboring landowner.
Courtly Scandals sounds like an intriguing book. You chose a good sentence.
Always love your stuff, Erin! Another great blogfest entry for you!
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bru
Dying to know what she's running from...
Great lines, you really put the readers in the scene with your sentences.
CD
I loved both sentences, but the second really took me into the scene. Brilliant.
Blimey! This is the first blog I've had to swear I didn't mind adult content! :-)
Hello - just breezed in from Summer's blogfest!
Your last sentence - oooh I love the flourish of Mary's exit!
Your first sentence - I love the immediate action here and can see Jane hefting up her skirts and running!!
Take care
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A running character drags the reader in at double speed - I can see her in action :) I love the ending too although I wonder if it was really the strong spirits that made her leave.
I like that opening sentence - it conveys an image to me of Jane as a 'Jane Austen tomboy' - stuck in hoop skirts, but wanting to run free.
I signed up for this blogfest late, but I'd love to hear what you think of my sentences.
Women in hoops skirts - you know their hiding something there, right?
Nice job.
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