Tuesday, March 6, 2012

Second Campaigner Challenge: Water Pear


Blame this on the 2nd Crusader Challenge.
This is waaaaaaaay outside of my box. I dabbled in poetry as a teenager as an expression of my angst, but not really since. It's almost enough of a bizarre phenomenon to warrant recording the date.  I have no idea why I was drawn to write a poem, but it seemed like a good idea at the time. This poem addresses:
  5.  Write a poem/flash fiction piece (in less than 200 words) about the water pear *without* using the words “pear”, “spoon”, or “droplet”.
It is definitely less than 200 words (at 83). I actually felt like its natural stopping place was after the 2nd verse, but opted for quantity over quality. Since I write romance, I made it a sensual experience.  I actively dislike the “toothsome delight,’ but I can’t think of anything better.

Joy in the Wanting

Spray dusting my skin
Cool, sweet, springtime fresh
Surprised, awed, I blink
My beaded lashes
Paint my blushing cheek
With soft, wet kisses

Longing for the taste
Just a reach away
Honeyed mist floating
Teasing my senses
With false promises
Gone in a flash. Lost.

Incorporeal
Unattainable
Tasting my own lips
With my seeking tongue
A lingering hint
Finds what could have been

No succulent flesh
No toothsome delight
Just a memory
To tantalize me
Or is it torture
To know I’m denied?

Thank you for reading my submission, #61. I look forward to reading through the other entries.

12 comments:

Morgan said...

Hooooly... This was FANTASTIC. I loved your use of words... Really lovely. Just "liked" ;)

New follower here... And from our bio, your novels sound fantastic--I'll look forward to our future posts!

Karyn Reed said...

Cool! I love it!

Cynthia said...

The heart-wrenching feeling of an unfulfilled romance! You painted that very well here. Thanks for sharing!

#35

meradeth said...

This is really heart-rending and beautiful! Great use of language.

Sally said...

That is a lovely poem, very emotional. WEll done. I wrote poetry as well #47

Michelle Pickett said...

Oh, I loved it! Very nicely done. I've never been able to write poetry - you pulled it off flawlessly.

Great job,
Michelle#74

www.michelle-pickett.com/blog
www.conciliumbooks.com

Gwen said...

I didn't find 'toothsome delight' to be that bad. It made sense to me.

#38

Ashley Nixon said...

definitely loved this. Great images! And you definitely made use of all the senses. Loved it!

C.M.Brown said...

I really enjoyed your poem! Great work!

Melissa said...

Loved it! Great use of words. = )Melissa Maygrove #14

Erin Kane Spock said...

@all - thanks for the comments. I had fun writing and now look forward to reading all your submissions.

I think "toothsome delight" brings "Afternoon delight" to mind. I don't know, it just makes me wince.

Susan Kane said...

Very evocative poem. Words were rich and full of imagery. Lovely.

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